Pour l'Anglais je devais faire un texte de 10 lignes environ partant sur Harry Potter dans le passage où il fait croire à Ron qu'il a but de la potion chanceuse
 
on avait le choix entre deux sujets et j'ai pris : faites comme si Harry avait vraiment mit de la potion dans le verre de Ron, racontez l'histoire à partir du moment où ils sont dans les vestiaires.
 
 
                        Harry Potter
 
Ron and Harry were the last two in the changing room. Hermione entered.She  was angry and said :
 "I saw you, you tipped lucky potion in Ron's juice at breakfast."
 "No I didn't!"answed Harry.
 "Yes, you did! I am sure!"replied she.
Harry was fedding up and he admitted:
 "Okay, Yes, I did, but, whether you like it or not, thanks to lucky potion we had won the match!"said he bad-temperedly.
Hermione went away without saying anything.She slammed the door. And she noticed that Draco Malfoy was spaying them. He had heard all the conversation. He ent to Albus Dumbledor and wanted to say everything but suddenly he losted his voice. And a few later, when he could speak again, he lost his memory thanks to Harry's lucky potion.
 
                                                               
Dites moi ce que vous en pensez et si vous voulez vous pouvz corriger mes grosses fautes de toutes façon je l'ai rendu à ma prof jeudi
 
 

c'est pas mal jtrouve!
 
c'est "answered" et "he lost" (his voice) et "spying them" (pour drago)
et tu inverse pas comme tu met "replied she" ou "said he"
et "we won the match" (pcque sinon cque tu a mis c'est "nous avions gagné" comme si c'est y a très longtemps)
et " a few later" jpense que ça se dis pas c'est plutot " a bit later" (mais là jsuis pas sure alors pour çui là demande à qqun d'autre de + "avancé" )
 
mais à part ça jtrouve ça bien

Merci

Harry was fed up and he admitted:
 "Okay, Yes, I did, but, whether you like it or not, thanks to lucky potion we  won the match!"said he bad-temperedly.
Hermione went away without saying anything.She slammed the door. And she noticed that Draco Malfoy was spying on them. He had heard all the conversation. He went to Albus Dumbledore and wanted to say everything but suddenly he lost his voice. And a few minutes later, when he could speak again, he lost his memory thanks to Harry's lucky potion.