En anglais, j'ai fais un contrôle d'expression écrite où j'ai eu 17/20, mais notre professeur nous les a rendus pour qu'on puisse corriger les fautes. Petit problème : je ne sais pas trop où j'en ai fait, et je ne sais pas toujours la bonne correction. Donc voici mon texte, et si vous le voulez vous pourrez corriger les fautes que vous avez remarquées, ça m'aiderait beaucoup, merci (:
Le sujet :
Imagine que tu es Noir Américain, l'un de tes ancetres était esclave. Raconte quand et comment il est arrivé(e) aux USA, ce qui s'est passé à l'arrivée, où il a dû travailler, ses conditions de vie, comment sa vie s'est terminée...
Mon expression écrite :
The story of my ancestor begin in 1630. His name was Harry. Harry was an African man, and he was born in 1610. He lived il a loca village, with his family. He worked in differents fiels with his father to receive a pay.
His life was changed in 1630 : at the begining of Savery. Harry was captured by a lot of white men, in his village. He was lost without his family, he missed them.
After, he was shipped with other black people. They all didn't know where they were brought. They were ill-treated by sailors without regard.
One week later, Harry arrived in America. Many Africans captured was dead during the trip. The survivors were sold by auction to white buyers. They were separated, and terrified.
Harry was lucky : a good master bought him. My ancestor worked on sugar plantations everyday, but at night, he readen newspapers in English. After a long time, Harry spoken English quite well.
A day, he had enough of his job, and he escaped with two other slaves.
They were gone of their house's masters, and they walked to the North.
They saw all black people have no rights, and were exploited.
At the end of his life, Harry was married with a black woman : Maria.
Together, they had two children.
Everyday, Harry prayed for all slaves, and said himself he was really lucky.
Harry was dead in 1680, in America.
THANKS FOR READING ! : )
Message édité par Almodys le 05-05-2012 à 13:31:28